rambling thoughts
I get really bored in some of my classes. My usual habit when bored is to draw. However, today I was compelled to write some poetry (how manly of me!). My usual poetry tends to revolve around unrequited love or heartbreak or something along those lines, but today I wanted to try something a little bit different. I say "a little" because I think love is a subject that can never get boring, especially in a poem. I managed to complete two verses today, but the lines are (in my mind) vastly different from each other. If I could come up with some way to correlate the two verses into a full poem, I would. However, as they stand, they are different entities.Here is the first one, but it was hastily written, so don't be too hard on it.
The love you feel for those near,
Gives perspective on your life.
Whether good or bad, you tend to fear,
That outside the quiet is strife.
I really don't know what I was thinking about when I wrote that line. I was trying so hard to match it with the next one, but as I said, it was hastily written.
The next verse was one I liked a little better.
There is a place where time ends,
Giving way to thoughts unbridled.
Where laughter and silence become friends,
And all things unknown are titled.
It was quite a stretch for me to rhyme "unbridled" with "titled" but I really love the 3rd line. I came up with this verse after listening to a song called "How it ends" by a guy named DeVotchka. To me, when I listen to music and survey life around me, it just seems like I am in my own little world. In that world, you can think and see more clearly.
Maybe I am rambling to some, but I make perfect sense to myself.
-brodie
posted by brodie @ 11:21 PM
4 Comments:
Hey man,
Call me tonight if you can.
that's an awesome blog comment, Jon.
Lovely poetry.
I think the first verse deals with love and the underlying strife of it or of the world in general. Because the last verse slightly alludes to heaven (that's what I got from it), you could make a connection about the strife and toil of many matters in life in general, and then point to the ending in heaven for those who are Christians.
But that's just me.
and who would you be?
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